Rachel Star Live

Dialogue

One concern I've had while writing this script is that the various people speaking all tend to sound alike. The reason is sort of obvious...the same person is writing their lines.

Lately I have been reading a lot of books during my job as a security guard. One thing I have noticed is that all the main characters tend to sound alike.

So, consequently, I'm not going to worry too much about it.

Lesson learned

I've decided that it's not a good idea to work on the screenplay if I'm exhausted. For the first time since writing those seven pages I mentioned eariler, I looked at what I had written with an open mind.

Simply put, it was terrible. Awful. Very bad. No good.

It included just about every movie cliche that I despise. Well, not all of them, but there were a lot of them. Last night while I was security-guarding, I rewrote the first three pages. I cut out a ton of the stuff that wasn't good, and changed my approach to the story. I'm feeling a bit more confident about this second draft of the first draft.

In a few days, however, we shall see if this version is any good.

Awful

So far, the first draft is pretty terrible.

Progress is nice

Yesterday I finished the outline, and today I typed seven pages of the script. I'm not thrilled overall with the result thus far. I also think that the script as it is originally written will be somewhat more than 15 minutes. I'm at the 7 minute mark and we haven't even moved the story to Wal-Mart, where most of the action takes place. If the script is longer than thirty pages, I will have to make some serious cuts.

The List

The List is expected to be the first film from Fruitless Pursuit Films, currently in development and tentatively slated to film in March 2006.

Scott Hammond and his wife, Tiffany, decide to add some spice to their marriage by role-playing...pretending they are having an affair with each other. To prepare for the evening's activities, Scott is sent to purchase condoms. He is nervous about this errand, as he is the youth pastor for a small Baptist church in North Carolina where the church's pastor has made it quite clear that he finds condom usage unacceptable. Of course Scott is spotted by church members, and his job is to make it through the night and to the checkout counter without word of his "illicit" activities reaching his boss.

Okay, enough with the press release. I hate writing like that.

I first came up with the central idea for this short about a month ago, and I'm still in the initial planning stages. At the moment I am trying to write an outline for the script; a road map, if you will, for everything significant that happens. When the outline is finished, I'll write the script.

This will probably not take as long to develop as Snafu, mainly because it's shorter. I'm aiming for 15 minutes as opposed to 90. For the past week, though, I've been stuck. My main problem has been developing some supporting characters. Hopefully over the next few days I'll be able to flesh out the details and make some headway on the outline.

If you have character ideas, feel free to leave a comment.